chapter 1
“Just one more time it won’t hurt”
Debras thought ran through her head like a cheater running across the horizon.She felt like she was going to pop any second! Lizzie her cavalier lay at the end of the bed sleeping soundly.it was 3:15 now and Debra was getting tired.the room was as dark as night and the curtains were tightly shut.
the lion in her garden was as cold as ice and made out of stone. Every time it was touched it brought doom.
Debra carefully got out of bed and put on her red and purple sneakers and crept across the creaky floor.
when she got to the door she heard Eilleen her 7 month old baby sister crying, Debra ran out of the door as fast as she could out of the house. again she came face to face with the lion that made her have nightmares, and ,now her worst nightmare was about to come true…
by Hannah in 5H
7 responses so far ↓
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Lucy
// Oct 15, 2009 at 8:50 am
Wow! This is a great piece of writing and I think Roald Dhal is going
to have to get typing!
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chloe tedde
// Oct 15, 2009 at 12:06 pm
i love your story hanna!mr.dhal would be very pleased of you for your woudafull work you have used adjectives and lods of distription and i don’t think you have used any simalis and don’t think you used much action either on diologe that is good because rould dhal had used speech in his first chapter.
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chloe tedde
// Oct 16, 2009 at 2:26 am
i like your stories i wish this was my stories i bet mr hatfield and roald dhal would be very pleased with you well done hanne!!!!!
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chloe tedde
// Oct 16, 2009 at 2:28 am
i like your stories hanna from chealsea and chloe
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Lauren Ives
// Oct 16, 2009 at 4:35 am
That’s a great story Hannah!
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James Jackson
// Oct 19, 2009 at 12:00 pm
i like cheetars
kk story
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Lauren Ives
// Oct 20, 2009 at 12:43 pm
You cant spell cheetahs James!!
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